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Crop circles by ~adalaine:iconadalaine:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Open



In her mother's wheat field, she
tried to kill herself.

The soy will not grow when
the corn ears will not listen,
in denial in the ground.

(she tried to crawl, but
underneath six feet is such a height
when you're only five-three)

Barley is a burly male-factor, littering
and loitering among the rapeseed.

(scarecrows do not work
on men who break stems and raze girls)

Flax and linseed in fertile crescents
become nightmares
as she is laid, again and again, in the field:

there is no catcher in the rye,

just a seed in her stomach, and imprints
of crop circle bruises on her back,
reminders of a brutal hoax.
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Author's Comments


03.16.09: it is 12:28 in the morning and I am tired.


(of men, deceit, and betrayal)

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*Aedammair-Feline Apr 23, 2009, 10:22:09 PM
Wow... powerful words that hit me to the core.
The imagery is vivid and almost overwhelming.

Great piece.

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..:skullbones: Aedammair-Feline :skullbones:..

I wanna hurt you just to hear you screaming my name....

:bulletpink: Rip your heart out at =RawEm0tion :bulletpink:
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*zefiraelRain Apr 24, 2009, 2:02:47 AM
D:
bad subject, rather well-written poem. well done~
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~Sapient-Butterfly Apr 24, 2009, 5:00:34 AM
I love it, the theme is great and very nicely written :)
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=ToaAkatsuki Apr 24, 2009, 7:02:23 PM
Very, very good. I love how you went about the theme. Powerful metaphor-analogy things. :P

--
The world is not beautiful; therefore it is. ~ Kino no Tabi

~ShortStackStories
~Amaranth-Portal
=RawEm0tion
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~Ejm-written Apr 25, 2009, 3:35:05 AM
Extremely well written. Your choice of words an imagery lends itself well to the emotions and metaphors expressed here.

--
"Don't forget that I cannot see myself. My role is limited to being the one who looks in the mirror." - French poet Jacques Rigaut
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~carmenabello Apr 25, 2009, 6:49:46 PM
It's so amazing I don't know what to say. I'm speechless! :heart:

EDIT: Oh, darn, I just said something! I must not be all that speechless after all...

--
I've left dA for good. Sorry. Stalkers make life hell.
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~Danteholic Apr 26, 2009, 3:04:38 PM
I quite liked this.

--
"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:iconadalaine:
~adalaine Apr 30, 2009, 6:57:39 AM
thank you so much :thanks:
:iconadalaine:
~adalaine Apr 30, 2009, 6:58:10 AM
yes it is...but thank you :thanks:
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