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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-11-05
:icon520romeo:
520romeo Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
gah. always.
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014
:blushes:
thank you for adding it to your +favorites :cuddle:
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xxBoneless Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is why you're amazing.
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014
aww thank you! :thanks: and you're amazing for all the encouragement you give. :heart:
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ChinZaPep Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Student Digital Artist
"... I fear if I don't hide everything between line
breaks and 
alluring alliterations that allude to always and for-never,
I'll spell out the stark memories of my future and leave myself
bare
without metaphors to hide my skin in,
hoping it will become a metamorphosis
and I'll become someone better."

This is uncannily -- I mean uncannily -- accurate and a perfect description of... me! I love this poem so much and I often come back to read it but this is the first time I realized how much I identify with it ;V; I really enjoy your writing and I can't wait to see more!
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adalaine Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
oh gosh, I'm very, very sorry for such a late reply! I'm so happy to know you really enjoy my poem and that you've taken the time to read it not just once but multiple times. I'm also happy to know you identify with it; I don't write so much anymore, but I think one of the main reasons I still occasionally do and then post them here is to hopefully find people who can connect with my poems. Thank you so much for reading my poem and for your comment! And also for adding me to your +watch! It all means so much to me and I truly appreciate it. :thanks:
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ChinZaPep Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Apologies for my late reply too!! ;O; School has been so busy...

Oh my gosh it's no problem!!! <33333 I really do connect with this and I look forward to reading more from you!! QvQ You are so welcome... you deserve all of that and more!!! ;u;
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adalaine Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
:tighthug:
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animeOheart Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely:heart:! :happycry:
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
thank you so much! I'm sorry for such a late reply, but thank you also for the +favorites, and even adding me to your +watch! it really means a lot to me :thanks:
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Impressive :) I think there is a lot of truth to it.
I can especially relate to the last stanza.
And prosetry sounds like a great word for something between a prose text and a poem oô
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much! I'm really happy you particularly favor the last stanza, as it's one of my favorites too. :heart:
(yes, I saw "prosetry" written somewhere on deviantArt in a random comment, and I like it very much so it stuck)
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome <3
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bumimanusiastock Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
very inspiring and so beautiful... I cry honestly... thanks for sharing it. congratulation on DD.. :hug:
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much!  as long as they're happy tears :huggle:
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bumimanusiastock Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
 yes it is happy tears.. :hug:
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
It's the rambles of a genius o v o
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
oh gosh, thank you so much. :blushes:
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
You're welcome :3
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ARCoty Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist
this is so wonderful and powerful and well-written along with so many other things that 'hit home'. this is a poem that I will come back to again somewhere down the road. thank you <3
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
ohh thank you for taking the time to read and leaving such kind words. ♥
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much! :heart:
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er49563 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student General Artist
would you PLEASE capitalize those I's..?  xD jeez..anyways, awesome poem.  liked it purely out of the title, but the poem itself is also fantastic.  great concept..  BUT THE Is!!! ICKKKKKKkkk
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
the lack of capitalization is important to those stanzas of the poem. but yes, I used to wish all i's would be capitalized in poetry, but I think it can add something more if used well; hopefully that's the case in mine.
anyway, I'm happy you enjoyed it. ♥
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er49563 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Student General Artist
:I well, I don't get it but alrighty.  I am happy I read it. :)
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xXPhantomXXx Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I have
secrets spilling into the sky
and I wish the wind would bear them away
forever
so I could stop spending nights sleepless
thinking about things I can never say
and all the things that came out wrong.

.....

I have the cruel notion that I am a murderer,
slicing my thoughts into slivered segments
and burying them separately in unmarked graves 
carved into the rotten ruts of my brain that I've only temporarily 
forgotten.
I always hope they will dissolve--
perish the thought!--
and cease to exist in my mind anymore.
But that's the trouble with burying things alive:
they have a way of taking root, stirring and returning
to haunt my heart
and somewhere, 
someone is asking the back of my mind

"if you are your own victim,
will they blame you for suicide?"


I love this!!!!!!!
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much! :heart:
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4hikari Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
"that someone could taste it through his eyelashes"'
Oh gosh. That stole a little bit of my heart away. Beautifully written.
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you very, very much! that bit is one of my favorites too. :heart:
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Chimetals Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
Love the twists you played on the words--a phrase you'd except to head in a certain direction takes a sudden redirect with the logic of dreams. Not a 180 from what you'd expect, as some people do, but a completely unpredictable yet delicious phrase. That's a hard power to tap, right there.
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much! I feel like that's something I always end up subconsciously doing in my writing, so I'm really happy you enjoy it. ♥
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Roseblossom9029 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful

I think most if not all poets can relate

And congrats on the DD!
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you very, very much! ♥
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Roseblossom9029 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you're welcome!
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lilfixit Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
That's how I feel the ocean too.
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Definitely deserving of the DD. Loved the use of 1 and 0 in the metaphors.

(I can also relate to the stanza with moments from your childhood in it. This piece is generally really something.)
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much!  and I'm happy you like those parts; the whole poem is personal, but especially those sections. ♥
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AquaGalaxy Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
congrats on the DD! >w<
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you! ♥
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hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student
this is AMAZING!!!!!!! *O*
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you so much!  I'm so happy you think so. ♥
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hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Student
you're welcome!! ^^
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anguamoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
I'm not quite sure, why I'm in tears now, but your words have touched me deeply. I'm not even sure, if I understand everything correctly - and I'm sure, this can be read again and again, but already it feels absolutely true. I don't know, if this is a writers thing, but for me, your words are a song, resonating perfectly with my own emotions.
THANK YOU so much for sharing this!!!
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
aww thank you so much!  I'm so happy you feel a connection with it because it's all my emotions too.  your comment really means a lot to me; thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and leave your words. ♥
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childwoman Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely and rambling, yet subtly coherent. Really nicely done.
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:iconadalaine:
adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
I think a lot of my writing is just rambling, but I'm so happy you think it came out lovely as well. ♥
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This truly deserves a DD. very touching and well written :) 
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adalaine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
ohhh thank you so much! :thanks:
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